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The words aren’t coming now.
No pallid metaphor.
No crooked simile.
You’ve won.
A complete and total victory.
Emotionally checkmated an unworthy opponent.

The only way I could ever talk to you
Was through these words of mine.
But you’ve taken them now.
They were always going to be yours,
I just wanted to give them to you.

I was playing for time.
And you were playing to win.
pardon my language, but im feeling really fucked up right now. im in a pretty dark place right now. im not even particularly proud of what i wrote just now, but i had to write this before i ended up feeling it even more. ive had a really awful, bizarre, surreal, and emotionally trying last couple of weeks, and the last few days have only compounded the matter exponentially. i want to sleep. but the things we want and the things we get are almost never the same. i would tell you to enjoy, but theres nothing to enjoy here.
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TheLionAndTheFish Featured By Owner May 19, 2013
This is really good, John. It's sad, but really good! The words you choose and how you've combined them... I wish I'd read this sooner! Really hope you're in a better flow now!
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feekmasterson Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much :thanks:

yeah i was in a pretty bad frame of mind when i wrote that. im still feeling pretty down lately, but fortunately that particular sad emotion has subsided.
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incogxito Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this is really good. and i love the part. the last lines

"I was playing for time.
And you were playing to win."

have taken meeee
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feekmasterson Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much! :thanks:
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FlinchSaint Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It's filled with an honest and tremulous sorrow, and even if you hate what you wrote right now, hopefully one day you'll read it again and feel proud that you could capture such awful feelings and turn them into beautiful poetry.
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feekmasterson Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much, it means quite a lot to me :thanks: i was in a really bad place when i wrote that, but i hope youre right, and that ill be able to appreciate this at some point.
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PurpleAnimeArtFreak Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Totally awesome :D Love the feeling you put into it
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feekmasterson Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much
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palesile Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Even though you weren't in a happy place when you wrote this, (I'm so sorry, love, I hope you feel better soon) you should be proud that you could write something so powerful. And I don't mean motivational or inspirational or any 'powerful' crap like that. I mean what you've got here is literally bursting with emotion and that's a beautiful, beautiful thing. It's like a punch in the face... but the kind that makes you better in the end.
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feekmasterson Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much. it really means a lot to me.
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