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The sun is setting.
The last rays of today come through the blinds
Casting splintered, oblong shadows.
A small speck of dust gets caught in the light.
And for one glorious moment,
It is illuminated.
A beautiful thing surrounded by a sea of shadow.
I watch it fall back into obscurity and sigh.

Another hollow laugh;
The moment strikes me a bit funny.
Such a beautiful insignificance.
My head falls slowly to my hands.
Eyes closed hard,
As if I close them hard enough and open them
Things will be different.

A silent plea, and I open my eyes
And stare into a determinately empty room.
Another sigh and another laugh.
If I were dreaming this,
Then Life is crueler than I thought.

A deep breath steels me for my night.
The cold tile of the bathroom floor
Gives me a resolute welcome.
And the bottle in my hand
Prepares to offer his help.
The offer is not without its strings.
But I accept it, as I always do.

The sun has gone now.
I swallow hard and hope that I can sleep through the night.
Hope I can make it through this sneering darkness.
I've made it before.
I do every time.

And if I make it tonight…
Life is crueler than I thought.
feeling down (whats new), but in a writing mood, and this was what i captured.
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TheLionAndTheFish Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
Heavens, John, this is so amazing. 'The last rays of today come through the blinds', holy guacamole that's beautiful! You got me hooked from the beginning till the very last line. I could actually feel you, feeling the desperation, the misery... And this treacherous bottle. This is going to be faved.. Like.. So hard!;)

PS. I hope you're doing ok!
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feekmasterson Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
wow thank you!! it means so much to me :thanks:

and it always makes me so very happy when i can make someone feel something with my writing. even if they arent always good feelings (theyre never good). so again, thank you heaps!

PS-> im actually feeling a lot better. the last few days have had theyre ups (woo!) and theyre downs, but im feeling a lot better than when i wrote that. so thank you! :aww:
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TheLionAndTheFish Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013
You're very welcome, as always:aww:

Glad to hear you're doing better! Keep up the good spirits!:)
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PurpleAnimeArtFreak Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This one is up there in your best ones ^_^
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feekmasterson Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so so much! :hug:
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FlinchSaint Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The way you pin-pointed certain moments and lingered on them I really liked, how a speck of dust leads to pondering one's own insignificance, gave a feeling of connectedness. Very nicely done.
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feekmasterson Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so very much! it really means a lot to me. and im really glad you enjoyed it :aww:
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palesile Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It went from feeling quite free verse to sounding rather like a story and I liked that aspect about it a lot :)
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feekmasterson Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very very much. im glad you enjoyed it :aww:
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